Board Thread:Improvements and Issues/@comment-29325824-20190819092552/@comment-5398287-20200227214418

Aaaaaaand proofread.

As far as feedback goes, after having gone over all the chapter summaries you wrote for these pages, I would say:
 * 1) You're a lot farther along in experience and skill than I was when I started out here.
 * 2) I would recommend fewer commas in sentences to let things flow better.
 * 3) I'd also recommend more variation in sentence beginnings - this is something I've only just learned to do, but I find it's easier to keep things interesting and maintain impact by not having sentences only start with verbs and "as/when". Not to toot my own horn here, but the chapter and episode summaries I've been writing display this better than I could explain it here.
 * 4) As demonstrated in this last proofread of mine, certain sentences you're writing can stand to be "mixed around" and reworded to avoid less "halting" in the structure, in line with the point about commas.

Other than that, no complaints here. You know my stance on this story pretty well by now, but that doesn't change the fact that you did a damn good job with (to my recollection) your first summary project. Honestly, it's good enough that I'd have no qualms with you writing up the summaries for all the other novels as well - and given how much of a control freak I can be about writing styles and formatting on this wiki, that's basically the highest praise I can offer. No pressure to get to it right away if you want time to cool down, though.